教老年人使用智能手机的诊所

Most young people are always on their phones, which may upset many people. However, a group called Girl Scouts (女童子军) is receiving praise for setting up its first walkin clinic for elderly people, who have difficulty understanding how to unlock the secrets of their smart phones. Some do not know how to text others while some are still ambitious about the network industry.

The clinic served as a special place for the aged in an orderly fashion.Each teen spent at least an hour of one-on-one time with the old people.Based on their technological knowledge,each girl scout was assigned to teach different aspects of smart phones.

Some of the aged actually wanted to take part in e-commerce and needed help to set up a payment account on their smart phones,while others simply had trouble when learning how to send messages to their family members.“I was teaching this older woman how to text,and the first thing she did was send a message to her daughter,”one of the scouts said.“How sweet it was!It just made me feel really,really happy.”The older woman was very excited and thanked her again and again.

In addition to arranging group lessons for all of the seniors to review together at the end of the clinic, the youngsters even printed out brochures and guides for the seniors to take home in case confused seniors would encounter problems with their smart phones in the future. The brochures and guides were well-designed and well-written, which can be read with ease.The seniors found them quite convenient and helpful.

The girls earned their“Silver Award”for their job. After experiencing the success of their project,the girls hoped to organize more clinics in the near future.Besides,they would advocate that more young people join them and work as volunteers for more oldsters who are in need.“Those girls were just great,”said Nancy, a great-grandmother who once visited the clinic.“They were ready for us and had a very mature attitude to answering our questions,and they deserved the praise.”

Ⅰ.Text-centered chunks

set up 创建；
建立

unlock the secrets 解开秘密

be assigned to do 被安排做

take part in 参加；
从事

have trouble 有问题；
有困难

in case 以防万一

in the near future 在不远的将来

deserve the praise 值得表扬

Ⅱ.Text-centered sentences

1.which引导的非限制性定语从句

Most young people are always on their phones,which may upset many people.很多年轻人经常沉迷于他们的手机，这让很多人感到困扰。

【点石成金】本句中，which 引导非限制性定语从句，指代前面的Most young people are always on their phones，并在从句中充当主语。

【运用迁移】汤姆会说四门语言，这让我们很吃惊。

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2.who引导的非限制性定语从句

However, a group called Girl Scouts is receiving praise for setting up its first walk-in clinic for elderly people,who have difficulty understanding how to unlock the secrets of their smart phones.但是，一个被叫作“女童子军”的组织因创立第一家不需要预约的诊所，指导老年人使用智能手机而获得赞誉，这些老年人不知道如何解开智能手机的秘密。

【点石成金】本句中，who引导非限制性定语从句，先行词为elderly people，在从句中充当主语，从句意为“不知道如何解开智能手机秘密的老年人”，即“不会正确使用智能手机的老年人”。

【运用迁移】出生在河北的李大钊，是中国共产党的主要创始人之一。

3.after+V-ing作状语

After experiencing the success of their project, the girls hope to organize more clinics in the near future.经历了这个项目的成功后，那些女孩希望在不远的将来组织更多诊所。

【点石成金】After experiencing the success of their project 为after+V-ing作状语，因主句的主语为the girls，所以使用V-ing形式表示主动语态。

【运用迁移】做完作业后，我们去散步。

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假定你是李华，近日，你打算给校报的Society Today专栏撰写一篇新闻稿，报道女童子军创办诊所教老年人使用智能手机的助人活动。要点包括：

1.活动目的；

体育课堂的游戏设计不能是盲目的设置。要有一定的针对性和目的性，要能够实现辅助教学目标的宗旨。要针对课堂主题，形成游戏与教学任务的密切联系，灵活的将教材内容实现游戏式的表现，从而实现教学活动的灵动与乐趣。

2.活动内容；

3.活动意义。

注意：

1.词数80左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.至少需要使用一个本文中解析过的句式；

4.注意段落内的逻辑关系。

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本次的写作任务是写一篇校园新闻稿，其特点是语言简洁，结构清晰。写作要求报道“女童子军”创办诊所教老年人使用智能手机的助人活动，并且需要使用非限制性定语从句或现在分词作状语的句式。这些写作要求基于阅读语篇，我们可以通过提炼整合“女童子军帮助老人的经历”“女童子军的优秀品质”等核心内容，整合同主题阅读材料的内容和语言，梳理写作思路和积累素材。

一、语篇解码

(一)主题归纳

What is the text mainly about?

(二)结构梳理与内容分析

Fill in each blank with only one word according to the text.

二、素材积累

（一）主要经历类的核心表达

1.spend time with sb 和某人一起度过一段时间

2.teach sb how to do sth 教导某人如何做某事

3.In addition to doing sth,sb even did sth in case...除了做某事，某人还做了某事以防……

4.After doing sth,sb hopes to do sth 做了某事后，某人还希望做某事

（二）优秀品质类的核心表达

1.receive praise for doing sth 因做某事而获得表扬

2.earn sth for sth/doing sth 因（做）某事而获得某物

3.be just great 的确很伟大

4.be ready for sb 时刻准备着帮助某人

5.have a very mature attitude to doing sth 对于做某事有很成熟的态度

6.deserve the praise 值得表扬

（三）新闻稿常用的核心表达

1.Word came that...消息传来……

2.In order to/So as to/Be aimed at/With the purpose of...目的是……

3.First...Then...After that...首先……然后……接着……

4.The activity is welcomed by...这个活动广受……的欢迎。

5.It is this activity that...正是这个活动……

6.The activity helps us get a further understanding of...这个活动帮助我们对……有更深的认识。

7.This activity not only...but also...这个活动不仅……而且……

8. We all consider it meaningful and necessary for us to participate in...我们认为参加……是有意义且必要的。

三、写作支架

本次的写作任务是写一篇以记叙为主、议论为辅的新闻稿，根据任务的要求，语篇结构可定位为“活动目的+活动内容+活动意义”。文章的框架如下：

With the purpose of...,some girls,who were named Girl Scouts,set up their first walkin clinic...(活动目的)

The clinic is devoted to...(活动内容)

The clinic is welcomed by...It not only...but also...(活动意义)

四、语篇过手

根据以上提供的主题、核心表达和语篇结构，写出新闻稿的第一、二、三段。第一段介绍创建诊所的目的，第二段具体描述诊所的负责内容或者运作方式，第三段描述活动的意义。总词数控制在80左右。同时，学习运用前文阅读中出现的非限制性定语从句或现在分词作状语等高级句型。尤其要注意表达的内在逻辑关系，需要注意使用恰当的连词。

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